User:Rosenberg22/Humanitarianism in Africa/NateLentz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rosenberg22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rosenberg22/Humanitarianism_in_Africa
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Humanitarianism in Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Wow, Jacob, you've written a really excellent article here! The lead is much more effective than the previous one, adding real information and a concise overview of the state of humanitarianism in Africa historically and now. I think that the terms section that you added is particularly helpful to the overall article. It gives the reader the tools to better understand the rest of the article, and by itself offers a great amount of information from reputable sources about some of the pillars of humanitarianism in Africa. The brief history section again adds important information, but I would say the the visual organization of it is a little confusing to me. I think maybe if the last subheading of that section, overall peacekeeping, served as more of a lead for that section, and the section would just outline the three examples of UN peacekeeping, maybe that would be a touch clearer? If not, maybe just changing the size of the font of the subheadings or something like that could help break up that section a bit more, at least visually. Beyond this point, you've done an excellent job of expanding and clarifying the content that already existed, added great sources and making the article much more robust. The last section on current humanitarianism seems a bit short, but you've added so much already I think that section is probably fine as is!

Response:

Hi Nate, thanks for the great feedback, glad you like the edits I made. I agree that the current humanitarian section could use more, as well as fixing the celebrity section. The advice on reorganizing the history subsections is a good idea and I will be sure to try and make it more visually pleasing and easier to navigate.