User:Roxlindy/Bisexual erasure/Ismahd Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Roxlindy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Roxlindy/Bisexual erasure


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bisexual erasure

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Roxy! Here's my peer review:

Lead

The new lead starts off with data and numbers, which make the article more engaging.

Content

I consider the content added relevant to the topic, as well as up-to-date. All the content was appropriate and definitely belonged in the article, in my opinion. It deals with Wikipedia's equity gaps and addresses a historically underrepresented population.

Tone and Balance

The content is presented in a neutral tone, except by the end, when it seems more like an opinion–even if I agree with it personally.

Sources and References

The content is high quality, backed up by relevant and reliable sources of information.

Organization

The content added is well-written, concise, clear, and easy to read. I appreciate the order of the content and how in ends with a solution, but it should be changed so it doesn't sound too biased.

Overall impressions

The content added has helped me better understand the issue, and the way it was presented was a key part of it. I would put dividers in-between the parts, with subheadings. But, in general, very good job!

- Isma