User:Roxlindy/Bisexual erasure/Jasminegpaz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Roxlindy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Roxlindy/Bisexual_erasure?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bisexual erasure

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content the user has provided has improved the overall quality of the article and follows the structure of the original article seamlessly. The central strength of this draft is that it presents valuable information to readers in a clear manner. However, the content still has room for improvement with respect to keeping a neutral, informative tone as the draft started to assume a persuasive tone near the end of the draft when discussing potential remedies to eradicating imposter syndrome within the queer community. Smaller improvements include minor spelling issues and missing citations for sentences that explain concepts or present new information.

"Biphobia is the idea of backlash toward bisexual individuals from media and within the LGBTQ+ community. This can be examined through negative stereotypes of the community such as bisexual individuals being “hypersexual” and “unfaithful."

"Bisexual invisibility or erasure is essentially the idea of ignoring, or removing the evidence of bisexuality. These biases will then combine with interpersonal and legal discrimination to create negative outcomes that are specific to the bisexual community."

"It is evident that bisexual people face biases on many fronts: from the media, friends, family, service providers, employers, heterosexual people, but most commonly from people who identify with the LGBTQ+ community. One example of this is when a bisexual youth shows higher incidents of risk and risky behavior due to the discrimination they face from family and friends."

"Research suggests that bisexual individuals suffer worse mental health than cisgender, heterosexual, lesbian, and gay individuals."

My only suggestion is that sentences such as the ones copied above are reviewed to see if a citation is needed.