User:Rrbird18/sandbox

Evaluating Eldad ha-Dani article.

To begin with, this article is confusing in structure. There are numerous run-on sentences and the paragraph breaks seem arbitrary and confusing. For someone who has already read the text, the summary is generally possible to follow. However, for someone without a background in the text and a decent understanding of Jewish tradition, the summary section of the article is all over the place.

There are also very few source citations, and the references section of the article is confusing and difficult to navigate. Given that the heading to the article references a lack of citations, I was surprised to find that the only discussion in the "talk" page was about potential racist slants to the article. There are three contributing editors arguing about Judiasm's place as a religion or race, and the potential presence of non-white Jews.

In editing this article, I will try to break up some of the run-on sentences and long paragraphs to contribute to legibility. I will also look for sources to back up the claims made about Eldad, and potentially give some sources that will provide background to some of the less commonly-known elements of Jewish tradition (ex: the word haggadic is not explained at all).