User:Rrevia/Bone age/Drew.Broda Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rrevia


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Bone Age


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Rich,

Overall, I thought you did a fantastic job on this article. You really added some great content to this page. I think you did a good job at adhering to your plan and accomplished a lot with this page. I liked that you added the sections that you said you were going to add, i.e. Measurement techniques, Clinical significance, and Physiology. The only part of your plan that I think you could still work on would be the MRI techniques for bone age. I also think you could add some wikilinks to many of the sections. I don’t think you need to add anything to this page from a class perspective, but please see below for section specific comments.

Lead


 * Really good. I felt like I understood the topic from the lead section alone.

Measurement techniques


 * Good. Very informative.
 * In the first paragraph I might add why the presence of bones can help determine bone age. The average reader may not know the carpal bones are radiolucent in babies.
 * Last paragraph last sentence Gruelich and Pyle atlas: I would remove “patients”. Flows better without it and keeps the page more open to nonmedical readers.

Clinical Significance


 * Easy to understand a difficult topic.
 * I would cite the last two sentences in the last paragraph.
 * Height Prediction and Evaluation of growth abnormalities (the sections that you didn’t write) could benefit from more citations.
 * The table is amazing and is a great explanation of how bone age is affected.

Physiology


 * Good job explaining a difficult topic.
 * The sections you didn’t edit could benefit from more citations.

Media


 * Great images. They add a lot to the page and help the reader better understand the anatomy being discussed.
 * I might add an image to the lead section. I believe that this gives the article a picture next to the article when someone searches for it.

References


 * References 32 and 33 are repeats.
 * 36 and 37 need dates fixed.

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