User:Rsinthespace/Hula/RobieHillier Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rsinthespace


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Rsinthespace/Hula?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hula

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The lead does a great job of bringing you through the years and highlighting the important events. I think it's very appropriate how the introduction separates the music between its original roots and the westernized music that occurs after American contact, as it gives you the opportunity to view two different sets of events and really helps solidify the tone and balance of the article.

Content
This is a very well constructed article. It has been worked on since 2003 so finding places to add information could have been a daunting subject, yet the information and sources you have been working on are very important pieces of information that will serve the article well.

Tone and Balance + Sources and Refrences
I already commented on the tone and balance of the lead section, which does a wonderful job of giving fair representation to the original style even though the westernized history is probably more covered and accessible. The sources come from accredited journals and you use multiple sources to back up your information.

Organization
The article is well organized and I cannot think of anything to improve it. The photos are very helpful in visualizing the topic.

Overall impressions
There is tons of information in the article, as you would expect from an article that has been collectively worked on for nearly 2 decades. Your additions will compliment the article and will only make it better. You've done a good job of finding new information to better understand the topics.

Also sorry for the delay in posting this

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