User:Rsonderman/Scottish Colourists/Nasnake Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Rsonderman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Rsonderman/Scottish_Colourists&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Scottish Colourists

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

No work on the lead (yet!).

Content:

The content added to this article is all relevant and up to date. The information on the artists and style mentioned in the history section is expanded on in the new "Artistic Style" section being written. It doesn't necessarily cover any equity gaps but that is probably mostly because of the topic itself taking place in Scotland with the native white artists.

Tone and Balance:

There is no bias in any of the information presented, no persuasion used, and no over or underrepresentation of viewpoints.

Sources and References:

All of the links on the live page work and the ones being added seem to as well. Every claim is cited with what looks to be reputable sources from museums and experts on the topic.

Organization:

A suggestion I would make to improve a part of this article is to include the ending of the first paragraph, "their style was confident and vibrant" into the first sentence of the same paragraph, it seems like it's barely hanging on to the last sentence after being directly behind a citation mark. Maybe rewording the end of the first sentence with "...planar brushstrokes, bold use of colour, and a vibrant and confident style." Then have the second sentence more focused around just the subject matter. I enjoy the wording and wouldn't want to lose it, but maybe just a rearrangement would read better!

The new paragraph being written is otherwise grammatically correct, no typos or errors and very easy to read and follow.

Images and Media:

No images or media (yet!).