User:RthB4/Social Welfare Programs in South Africa/Mattkandel Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RthB4


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RthB4/Social_Welfare_Programs_in_South_Africa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social welfare programs in South Africa

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Lead: I know the lead isn't a place where you did much editing so far, but it might be worth it to expand a tiny bit on the programs you are focusing on, as well as the corruption aspect written in the last sentence of the lead. Is the corruption still there? Is it in particular areas of the welfare program? That's one place I would be interested to see a little more, especially because that is such a political part of the topic you chose.
 * Content: The content here is really well done. There is a lot of clear concise writing on the social welfare programs, and I think you do a great job of adding in some really interesting statistics, like in the housing paragraph referencing the amount of subsidized homes. The Foster Child Grant paragraph seems super interesting, but I was wondering why it is that the value per month is double that of the CSG. I feel like expanding upon that and talking about why that grant in particular is so well funded, or at least funded better than the CSG would be interesting to understanding the dynamics of how these welfare programs operate.
 * New Info: You do a great job with providing new information in your edits, but I also wonder if you could link somewhere to how the welfare programs in South Africa compare or influence those in other African nations. It could be interesting to see how such a major political power on the continent influences the governmental programs like welfare.
 * Sources: Your sources are clearly good options, and certainly pertain to the exact issues and programs you are writing about. I wonder if you could get a few more sources about some of the stuff you didn't write as much on, just to expand on the credibility and the breadth of the article as a whole. Overall though you use your sources well and your new content is all backed up so great job!
 * Format: Your writing is great, can you link some of the more major welfare programs to a main page anywhere? It would be nice in some areas of the article to know a little more, and I just wonder if there are other articles designated specifically to some of those programs. Maybe not, but could be something to look into/think about.
 * Language: I think one thing you do really well is using shorter sentences that get straight to the point in a non-essay format. Keep up the good writing there!
 * Overall: This is a really cool topic, and I am so excited to see your final presentation and learn more about welfare programs in South Africa. I think it's so cool how many different topics we are going to get to see at the end of this.