User:RubBec03/Censorship in Japan/Ramijai Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

RubBec03


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RubBec03/Censorship_in_Japan?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Censorship in Japan

Evaluate the drafted changes
Draft adds more information on censorship during Japan's occupation. For example, the HIbakusha were heavily affected by Japan's censorship because the American occupation did not want anything that could be construed as negative and turn public opinion against them to be reported on. Thus leaving Hibakusha ostracized as their conditions were disregarded and therefore inexplicable to the public. There is also new information on the organizations that were created to enforce censorship during Japan's occupation by American forces, with details on their specific functions. These are good changes so far, and there are good sources that were used for this draft. One change I would suggest is in the initial sentence which begins with "Publications submitted by the press...," should instead of using quotes, use your words instead. I think you did a great job of inserting your work and making it a seamless transition with the original article, which is something I would like to do with my own.