User:Ruthieod/Undertreatment of pain/Kcl55 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username) Ruthieod
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Ruthieod/Undertreatment of pain

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? Yes, Ruthie's lead effectively reflects the content that she added to the page.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? Yes, the introductory sentence concisely and clearly describes the article's topic.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? Yes, the lead describes the major points of pain care disparities for racial and ethnic minorities.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? No, Ruthie discusses each of the aforementioned topics in her addition to the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The lead is concise.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? Yes, the content is on topic.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Yes, Ruthie's research is based off of recent, reputable sources.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? No, Ruthie was thorough in her addition, but does not include any off topic information.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? Yes, all of the content is neutral and fact based.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No, Ruthie remained neutral throughout her addition.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? No.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Yes, each of Ruthie's sources seem reputable and reliable.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? Yes, both of Ruthie's sources seem to reflect the available literature regarding racial disparities and the under treatment of pain.
 * Are the sources current? Yes.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? Yes.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? Yes, this addition helps readers understand all experiences regarding the under treatment of pain, resulting in a more full picture of the topic.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? The amount of content and facts provided create a very solid picture of the realities of the under treatment of pain for minorities.
 * How can the content added be improved? This could be improved by possibly adding some hyperlinks to other Wikipedia pages, and maybe changing the subheading to be more content specific.

Overall evaluation
Hey Ruthie, I really liked your contribution! It definitely helps readers understand a specific impact of racism in the medical field, without picking a side or showing any bias. Your sources seem like great finds, and they seem to support everything you’ve written. I was impressed by the amount of content you were able to produce, and your lead is really strong. I also liked how the information flowed in a really logical and easily digestible way. My two minor suggestions would be for you to consider a more specific subheading (something like “Disparities based on Race”), and to maybe look around for another wiki site to hyperlink it to. I know that these may not be exactly what you’re looking for, but maybe there's a wiki site similar to the Race and Health in the United States (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Race_and_health_in_the_United_States) or the Health Equity (https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Health_equity) pages. Maybe you could find a way to fit them in!