User:Ruthy Flint/Playboy/Sofiagierthy Peer Review

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Ruthy Flint
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ruthy Flint/Playboy
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Playboy

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The content included in the article is relevant to the topic and successfully explains controversies including playboy bunnies and the way they were treated. That being said, at some moments the content does seem slightly biased, specifically the last sentence of the Gloria Steinem section that says that "Through her expose, Gloria Steinem revealed the problematic aspect of the Playboy clubs and their treatment of their female workers." Although I agree with the statement (and most readers of this article would agree after reading the information from earlier in the paragraph), readers should be able to come up with their own opinions based on the given information. The sources given are reliable and provide valuable information, and the organization is clear and concise. There are a few minor grammar/spelling errors, but overall the draft does a good job of providing complexity to the overall Playboy wikipedia page and successfully conveys information about specific controversies.