User:RyanVpacific/The Life of Immigrants in California/KennethCaslib Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Declan McJalton


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RyanVpacific/The_Life_of_Immigrants_in_California?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

After reviewing my second peer's project, his was also written extremely well in an organized matter. My partner is nearly done with his project and there is a heavy amount of work being presented. All of the cites and references work perfectly well, allowing me to easily access them and their original roots. There are no images or media presented onto the project, and is mainly focused on the information being presented. My peer is also working on the same page with another peer, and the whole entire page is extremely organized section by section. His work has perfect spelling with very little grammar mistakes. Advice and recommendation I have can be to add an image or two, or even media to the page. Because there is so much information being presented on the page, it and cause the reader to lose interest in the article because the whole page is filled with words. Including images can capture the readers attention more, causing them to be more interested in reading the article. My peer also exceeds the amount of incorporating 2-3 secondary sources, with over 10 sources being utilized for this entire article. Overall, my peer's review was written extremely well and I will be coming back to this article after he adds more and fixes any mistakes that he has.