User:Ryanburns22/Abyssal grendier/Ryanburns22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kalebn24

Tmclaughlin80


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Kaleb: User:Kalebn24
 * Tim: User:Tmclaughlin80/Grenadier (fish)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Tim: Really good job. The first contribution (the one you published) fits in nicely. The only thing I would change about the second one where it says "Through the use of acoustic tracking devices, researchers were able to measure the responses..." I would say something more along the lines of "Acoustic tracking devices were used to measure the responses..." just to make it more concise.

Kaleb: Great job, I really liked your second and third contributions. They are good details. Your first one is good, too, but I would just change some of the wording. Instead of:

"The average response time to bait placed on the seafloor for C. armatus was 25 minutes and the fish stayed for an average of 150 minutes when recorded in February of 1990 and 1992. However, the times decreased to averages of 15 minute response time and 98 minute average stay in October of 1991. The differences in response rates have been positively correlated with an increased swim speed in October when compared to Feburary due to the enrichment of the benthos via marine snow."

I would consider changing it to:

"Response time to bait placed on the seafloor has been positively correlated with an increase in swim speed as a direct result of enrichment of the benthos by marine snow. Response times in February have been observed to be as long as 25 minutes, with the fish remaining for an average of 150 minutes, while response times in October were shorter with the fish responding after only 15 minutes and remaining for an average of 98 minutes on the seafloor."

Great work!