User:Ryankaty14/Social comparison theory/KarsonKester Peer Review

General info
RyanKaty14
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ryankaty14/Social comparison theory - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Social comparison theory - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hey Ryan, I am having a difficult time figuring out where exactly you are going to insert your written content into the already-published article, but I do have some notes based only on the content you have written.

'''I like and appreciate how you have real-life examples that are easily understood. This meaning I think it is good to have examples that most readers can relate to like your example of comparing yourself to someone who has better grades. I also think you are onto something by talking about social media heavily, as I believe social comparison on social media could have its own designated Wiki Page. I am sure you have the sources, but make sure whenever you go to make your changes live that you do not forget to cite them using Wikipedia's system for it, it is really easy once you put your citations in. I would like to see more factual information, especially in your last few sentences. This is not to say I do not like what you have written there, I am just saying that you could enhance your words with citations, but then again, it is a rough draft. Lastly, after scanning the already-published live article, I think that there is more to be said about competition and how it relates to this theory. I think that if you wanted to, focusing on that would prove beneficial.'''

I look forward to seeing your finished project.