User:Ryankirzner22/Violence against men/Laurencraven Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ryankirzner22


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ryankirzner22/Violence against men
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Violence against men

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Does not look like the lead of the original article has been edited by this student and it does not look like it has been updated to reflect the new content. The added section does not have a "lead" but its introductory sentence has clearly describe the topic.

Content:

The content is relevant to the topic as it talks about violence about men but it adds a new aspect; homosexuality. The content is pretty up to date and the information is from 2020-2021 and only examples are from earlier years. I think the article does deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps as violence against men is not often discussed on Wikipedia or in general.

Tone and Balance:

The content added is written in a very neutral way and there are no claims that seemed to be biased in a particular way. There are not many points that are overrepresented or underrepresented but there are some countries like the United States, that are not added into the discussion on violence against homosexual men. The content does not seem to attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or another.

Sources and References:

I do not see any sources or references listed other than links to other Wikipedia pages or definitions of words so all of the claims and statistics need to be backed up by sources and added to the reference section.

Organization:

The content is well-written and does not have many grammatical or spelling errors. It is also well organized into paragraphs that are of different sub topics.

Overall:

Overall, I thought the section defiantly was content that adds to the quality of the whole article and was important information to include. It was well-written and neutral which is great and easy and interesting to read. The only big issue I saw was a lack or sources and a reference section so just make sure to add good sources.