User:Ryanmullaneygt/Diane Downs/Doorleym1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

doorleym1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ryanmullaneygt/Diane Downs
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Diane Downs

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead: Peer has not added to the lead in her sandbox article. The lead already includes a strong introductory sentence that describes who Diane Downs is. It serves as a general summary of the article, highlighting some of the main points that will be displayed. Lead does not include too much detail. If the peer were to add the main points to the article, then they should add them to the lead.

Content: Content added to the Early Life section was relevant. Informs the audience about her strict home life and how she met her husband. Information added to the Shooting section added very informative details about the incident. The details about her emotions show how she wasn't innocent, which relates to the topic. Ryan added a substantial amount of information to the Children subtopic. She expanded on Diane's daughter, Becky Babcock. explaining her life and how her biological mom impacted her.

Tone and Balance: Overall, I would say that the article is neutral. It does lean toward the side that believes she is guilty, but she was proven guilty so those are factual statements.

Sources and References: Currently there are no sources listed in the sandbox article to cite your work. It is important to add the citation at the end of each new sentence to give credit to the source. There are sources in the published article, but maybe they were removed when you transferred it to the sandbox.

Organization: The article has a lot of information, but it is still very clear and concise. Under the Children topic, the last sentence is not a complete sentence. It is important to correct these grammatical errors to make the article clear.

Images and Media: As of right now, there are no images added to the sandbox draft. If images are to be added in the future, they should enhance the readers' understanding of the topic. The image should also be well captioned and follow copyright rules.

Overall Impressions: This article was very easy to read even though there was a lot of information added. The strength of the content is the amount of information added to the article. The weakness is the lack of sources used to cite the information.