User:RyeNicole/Ekoi people/Lyola-ann Peer Review

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 * RyeNicole

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User:RyeNicole/Ekoi people


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ekoi people
 * Ekoi people

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Evaluation:

The Ekoi people of Africa draft begins with the lead section. This section doesn’t seem to be updated with the new information drafted. Having a brief sentence that states that the importance of animals, art, and mythology are present within their community would probably do the job. The lead doesn’t seem overly detailed but the examples of the other groups that speak their language don’t seem necessary. Just keeping: “Other Ekoi languages are spoken by related groups, including the Etung, some groups in Ikom, some groups in Ogoja, Ufia, and Yakö.” Seems to keep the sentence flowing.

The content added is relevant. Good job on adding new sections such as colonialism, Ekoi society, and cannibalism. The new content added has up to date references and the ones that go back to the early 1900s are history based, so it doesn’t seem like it would affect the newer information about this community. Under the culture section there is one sentence stating that there are 7 clans. Each of these should be named and possibly have a section on those 7. Under the history section: “Each time the village is met with a blessing the people present offerings to the ancestors.” Maybe name examples of what offerings look like. Content added is neutral.

The content added is very clear and to the point. One grammatical error under history: water to drink and bath in from the river” I think it's meant to be “bathe” not “bath”.

I think the sections should be reorganized for the flow of the article. Maybe something like:


 * 1) Lead


 * 1) Geography


 * 1) History

- colonialism


 * 1) Culture

- Ekoi society

- Language

- Art

- Mythology

- Ngbe and Nnhimm

- Leopards

- Cannibalism

The broader topics should come first under culture. (Maybe?) (Just an idea?)

Most of the sources and references are reliable. However, reference 1 comes from Britanica and not a scholarly source. Reference 7 is a link to a video. I know that source is not from one of our class editors though! So, find a scholarly source to replace that information it adds to the article. The sources range from specific Ekoi topics such as “Ekoi skin masks” to broader sources that discuss “Encyclopedia of African Religion”.

Content added improved the article! The added colonialism section is so necessary and important information. A lot was added to the spiritual information that comes with this community too. Also remember to add more information on the cannibalism section.