User:Ryebreadm3/Katowice Conference/Sgm123445 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ryebreadm3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ryebreadm3/Katowice_Conference?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Katowice Conference

Evaluate the drafted changes
My peer review is short since the amount of content in the Sandbox draft. There may be some work elsewhere that has not been published. Let me know and I can check over it!

Lead

 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * The Lead does not appear to be updated with new content. If adjusting it, I recommend adding a note in your draft that it is in progress.

Content

 * The context/additional information added to the "Decisions" section is up to date and helpful. From the Sandbox draft, it appears that the student is planning to add more to the article body in general.
 * I recommend adding more information to the Participants section if there is more information available out there/in bibliography.
 * ", especially the attempts by the committee in Odesa." This could be an opprotunity to add more. Why did it fail? What happened? The source a sentence later quotes people, I would be interested in the original sources where these are quoted.

Tone and Balance

 * The content added is neutral, but there is not much of it. I recommend keeping up with the current tone throughout the rest of the sections added.

Sources and References

 * All new content is backed up with sources. The links do work, however I recommend attempting to find a primary source to add further credibility.

Organization

 * The content added has proper grammar and is easily readable.