User:Ryleeproudfit/Bustle/Caseys breakfast pizza Peer Review

General info
Ryleeproudfit
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ryleeproudfit/Bustle
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bustle:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Is everything relevant?

Yes, including the history of Sarah Bartmann and details about steatopygia helped me understand the origin of the bustle. Furthermore, including that steatopygia is not specific to one group is also critical.

Is the article neutral?

Yes, the writing style of the article is well-balanced and does not reflect too much of one viewpoint. However, the first sentence is written too much like a narrative.

Representation of viewpoints

Although I really like the "origin" section, I think more could be added on steatopygia outside of the context of Sarah Bartmann and Africa. Adding onto how it's just a thing that occurs across humans.

Sources

All links work and references are real and reliable sources. Good mix of scientific and historical sources. The Fausto-Sterling article from class and the article about bicycles really do elevate the article and lend it authority. More sources in the spirit of the bicycle article would be interesting, so we could see how different trends impacted the fashion of the bustle.

Facts/neutrality

The claim that the bustle aims to replicate steatopygia needs a citation, but the article's authors have noted that. Other than that, the density of citations is great and signals to the reader that this is a well researched piece. Dictionary.com and Britannica are cited which are good and neutral sources. For the academic sources, the information pulled from them is factual/unbiased and therefore does not need any sort of disclaimer.

Information recency/things to be added

The academic sources that discuss women's fashion and the medical nature of steatopygia are relatively recent and contain good information. The Fausto-Sterling article on Sarah Bartmann is older, but is still in line with modern discourse on the topic and is a wealth of information. As for the dictionary.com and Britannica citations, those come from websites which are regularly updated which increases their reliability.

If anything is to be added, a discussion of why the women's bustle went out of fashion would be appropriate. Also, including something about why Europeans wanted to emulate steatopygia would be enlightening.