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Practice Editing Here (Nov 23rd in-class Wiki session work)

 * This is a place to practice clicking the "edit" button and practice adding references (via the citation button).

Assignment # 3
Rationale for proposed change  The current sentence in the Wikipedia article is extremely vague and does not discuss which factors play a role in this ‘longer or ‘incomplete’ recovery time. The change is necessary to provide readers with a deeper understanding of these complications, and potential outcomes that can be expected in this situation. The article I have chosen for my secondary source focuses on age as a prognostic factor on traumatic brain injury; outlining potential burdens to recovery as co-morbidities increase. This change will provide a more coherent explanation for the ‘longer’ or ‘incomplete’ recovery time that may occur in this population. Critique of source A potential critique of the source I have chosen is that it is outdated (published in 2005). Although a more recent publication would be ideal, this article is still 10 years newer than the cited article for the existing sentence, published in 1995. Furthermore, the review incorporates a wide variety of sources, but does not outline the search strategy used to retrieve these resources. For this reason, the reader cannot account for biases, nor ensure that information from allrelevant studies could be retrieved. Bibliography  1. Flanagan, S. R., Hibbard, M. R., & Gordon, W. A. (2005, February). The impact of age on traumatic brain injury. Physical medicine and rehabilitation clinics of North America. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmed/15561549
 * Proposed changes I plan to revise the following sentence “People over age 55 may take longer to heal from mTBI or may heal incompletely”, found in the prognosis section of the Wikipedia article, as this does not provide adequate context or details. I would like to use information from my scientific article to discuss more specific characteristics pertaining to the healing process of mTBI in elderly patients (Flanagan et al., 2005). The sentence I would like to use to replace the existing sentence is as follows:  “Mild traumatic brain injury recovery time in people over age 65 may have increased complications due to elevated health concerns, or comorbidities. This often results in longer hospitalization duration, poorer cognitive outcomes, and higher mortality rates. ”

What to post on the Wikipedia article talk page?

 * This will also be covered on Nov 23rd in class. Your group should use the below template to share an outline of your proposed improvements (including your new wording and citations). Article talk pages are not places to share your assignment answers. The Wikipedia community will be more interested in viewing your exact article improvement suggestions including where you plan to improve the article (which section), what wording you suggest, and the exact citation (Note: all citations must meet WP:MEDRS)
 * You will not be able to paste citations directly from your sandbox to talk pages (unless you are interested in editing/learning Wiki-code in the "source editing" mode). We suggest re-adding your citations on the talk page manually (using the cite button and populating the citation by pasting in the DOI, website, or PMID). You will have to repeat this process yet again when you edit the actual article live.
 * Talk Page Template: CARL Medical Editing Initiative/Fall 2020/Talk Page Template