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Article Evaluation for "Book of the Later Han"
My first impression is that this article is not structured very well. The lead is not simply a lead. Under it is all of the information there is to gain from the article except for the listed contents of the book itself. The article would benefit from more headings and subheadings, and the information provided could be expanded upon, I think. For example, the third paragraph of the lead goes into detail about a section of the book called Treatise on the Western Regions. I feel as if this could easily be beneath its own heading titled "noteworthy sections" or "background" or something along those lines.

There is a good deal of information about the authors of the text and how it was compiled, but very little information about the type of information that the book contains. This may be an issue with translation or locating sources, but I feel as if with this lack of information regarding the context of the book, many people who come to this page may not find what they are looking for. Also, I have already done a cursory search of the ASU library page and have found lots of good sources discussing this book. The information about authors and compilers could easily be under a heading of "history of text", "creators", "authors" or "contributors" and not the bulk of the entire article and under the lead.

I would really love to see more information, from modern historians, about the ideologies, significance and legacy of this text. I'm sure that the information is out there, but there is literally zero interpretive or analytical data about this book in the article.

Article Evaluation for "Argebad"
This article is already a stub, so going into it I know that the information is going to be limited. But I think that what is there is doing more harm than good.

Like the article mentioned above, there is little to this article other than the lead. However, what is there is a vague and seemingly rushed story that is both unhelpful and hard to follow.

The information provided is sparsely cited (as a matter of fact, there is only a single citation for the entire article). Admittedly, just from a quick search, I have already found that the sources relating to this article are very few and far between (only a single source came up in the ASU library database), but there has to be more out there waiting to be found. Also, even though there is only the one source, it is additionally a source from 1969- nearly fifty years old. Even with the most minor historical characters, surely SOMEONE has mentioned him or included him in their research in the last fifty years.

The retelling of the story of the subject of the article and his involvement in the Septimanian rebellion is, to be frank, not extremely well written. The author struggles with tense and it reads more like an individual retelling the story of a fight between his friends than it does a piece on a historical event. I would love to see more historical context in the article, including cited evidence of Argebad's influence and effect on the characters in his story.

Even given the sparsity of the information provided in this article, I think that it could also benefit from some subheadings. It is just a quick run through of a story under a lead. Obviously, this article could use a lot of TLC. If only I could be paid to fill it in!