User:S.Li, UCSF/Genital leiomyoma/Jay9Z Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

S.Li, UCSF


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Genital leiomyoma
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Good, concise lead. The content categorizes leiomyomas into different types, making it easy to read. It might be a good idea to switch the order of listing them so it flows better: Uterine, Vaginal, Nipple-areolar, Scrotal (most to least information).

For uterine: What symptoms does it cause under "only 30% of people with uteri experience symptoms"? An explanation of why it causes anemia is also recommended.

I would suggest just including Signs and Symptoms under each leiomyoma type, since they appear different for each one.

Not sure why Uterine is listed below Causes and Risk Factors, but assuming it will be updated.

Under Causes: revise "Long-term results suggests that diets that are mostly plant-based, composed of fruits and vegetables, and rich in Vitamin D have a positive effect on the development of diseases, including uterine leiomyomas." which makes it sound like it promotes the development of uterine leiomyomas.

Under Risk Factors>Age: rephrase "delay their first pregnancy past the age of 30" since language makes it seem that everyone with uteri gets pregnant at one point.

Under Genetic Factors: "A mutation of a single mesenchymal cell, a stem cell that plays an important role in making and repairing bone, and fat - found in the bone marrow and adipose tissues, with the involvement of progesterone and 17 b-estrodiol can lead to these fibroids" is unclear, rephrase this to be more concise.

Overall, the language is inclusive and mentions people with uteri rather than women, and does not produce bias. See suggestion under Risk Factors>Age for one revision that can make it more equitable.

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