User:S. Chu Future UCSF PharmD/sandbox

7/27/20 In-Class Assignment: Steps for article improvement
Article: Sperm bank. Sperm bank

After reading through the article as well as the Talk section, I would like to clarify the intentions of sperm donors in a more objective manner. There are published studies looking into reasons men decide to donate sperm, whereas the article in its current state seems to make broad claims. The Talk section also brings up some questions about how race might play a role in both donation and selection throughout the process. The "General" section also lists a few controversies that I feel could have a separate "Controversy" section.

Adding a new section shouldn't affect the content of the page. It'll just be restructuring the current content and expanding on some of that information. As for clarifying the intention of donors, that will require further articles that will give a more complete perspective on the topic.

Article: Spermatocele. Spermatocele

Needs many citations on claims and further information to expand on the statements in all sections. I will specifically focus on the treatment section as well as the diagnosis section.

Adding citations shouldn't really affect other editors. The information I will be adding fits into the current structure of the article so it shouldn't have too much of an effect on other editors.

Peer Review on 'Tampons'
Overall, I think this group had really great additions to the original article. The new citations provided relevant new information and expanded upon existing information. Even with the addition of new sections, the logical flow of the article as a whole still makes a lot of sense. In their proposed edits on the talk page, this group aimed to add more citation/hyperlinks and additional information regarding safety, directions of use, and contraindications. They were able to add sections of information to expand on mTSS, mercury levels, other uses of tampons, availability of appropriate disposal, and how the tampon has evolved over time to increase safety for users. All of this information is backed with quality citations. They also added citations to existing statements on the article to further improve reliability of information. I liked that they included studies and even law cases relevant to the topic. I did see that some sections they added were taken out after review, such as one dedicated to instructions of us.

The points included are all verified with at least one secondary source. Most of these sources are from published reviews and journals. They also cited important product information directly from the FDA. There are also a good amount of hyperlinks that help explain mentioned topics beyond the scope of this specific articles. All of the added articles were easily accessible through the ‘References Tab’. However, some journal articles like [36] ‘Biodegradability of cellulose fabrics’ requires access or payment to read beyond the abstract. One citation, ‘A short history of periods’ [44] didn’t have a link attached at all.