User:SJFlood29/William Kittson/Emilyg01 Peer Review

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This article does a really good job of describing details of William Kittson's life, and I think there's a good amount of detail included that makes the article more complete. I think Kittson's journey is described really well here and I like that the article includes information such as which native groups Kittson's party encountered. There are some places where the wording could be changed to sound more neutral, like in the first paragraph where it says "his work should be recognized today as he was imperative for his group's success," and other phrases like that. I'd also suggest going through and adding citations to the sources in your bibliography. Overall though, I think this article is really detailed and organized well.