User:SJLupine/Water scarcity/Mattalee Peer Review

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I liked your addition here at the end. It adds enough to prepare the reader for your section on inclusion of indigenous knowledge.

Implementation of Indigenous Knowledge
In the sentence that starts with "Indigenous communities have navigated the rhymes of water availability...", I don't know if "rhymes" was a typo or not. Later in this section you mention using "Two-Eyed Seeing", however, there's no Wiki article you can link to for this and no in-text explanation is provided for this term. Therefore, if the reader wants to better understand "Two-Eyed Seeing", their only option is to go through the linked source, which is time consuming. I suggest not using the term "Two-Eyed Seeing" and instead simply explain how the western and indigenous perspectives have to be combined, as this would be more direct, clear, and cause less confusion.