User:SRobert99/1980 murders of U.S. missionaries in El Salvador/Melonology Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SRobert99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SRobert99/1980_murders_of_U.S._missionaries_in_El_Salvador?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * 1980 murders of U.S. missionaries in El Salvador

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? No, but I don't think the lead has to be updated if all that is going to be added is more historical context. However, moving "the four murdered Americans were involved in an international humanitarian aid mission which was accused by the régime of fomenting political opposition" with a citation (or something along the lines of it) into the lead would make some sense, to give a complete summary of the article's topic. The lead without any historical context makes the murders seem without reason.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? The content seems mostly relevant. I would add more links, like Cold War and Óscar Romero, but the historical background fits. Although it doesn't seem worthwhile to mention that "other countries practiced involvement and interference" if there aren't any particular countries to name besides the US. I'd add an example or strike the sentence.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Very recent sources for an incident that happened a while ago, nice job. None of them seem to violate wiki's guidelines either, nice job.

Overall Impressions


 * How can the content added be improved? Nuns aren't part of the clergy, so "El Salvador has a history of violence against clergy … just months before the four Maryknoll Sisters." insinuates they were part of the clergy and that is not factually true. Also I'd put a citation after "Fear and paranoia among the Salvadoran government was present leading up to 1980" because that seems like a statement that might face some contention. Overall, I think it's a good rough draft, that'd benefit from being a little more concise regarding the topic. Is it really relevant that there might have been US ground troops in El Salvador? US aid and support towards the perpetrators is definitely relevant, but helicopter airlifts might not be considered to be.