User:Saania Saxena/Linguine/Ksuong2001 Peer Review

General info
I am reviewing the work of User:Saania Saxena.
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Saania Saxena/Linguine
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Linguine

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello! Here is my peer review,

Lead

 * I can see that you have made valuable changes to the article and I think it looks great so far! I noticed that you added to the existing article however there were no changes made to the lead. Although the current lead is sufficient already, I suggest that you add a brief description of the articles major sections to better present the article. Be sure be concise when doing this as it provides context to the information presented.

Content

 * As for the content, I can see that the sources you provided are up-to-date and provide relevant details. Sources are more current spanning from 2019-2024 with diverse authors. I would suggest adding some sources that are a bit older. Starting with the history is was a good choice as it is useful in offering background and context. I would suggest expanding on how Liguria influenced the creation of linguine and maybe share about when Ligurian families would have this dish. As for the linguine dishes, I think you used great examples. I would suggest changing the formatting, maybe add some bullet points? We are just starting to get the hang of this so its okay to not have much down. Sub-topics you could focus on could be about it's production, nutrition, how to prepare it, or maybe some dishes that drew inspiration from it? I would take a look at the Wiki page for spaghetti or any other pasta to brainstorm. I know that this is a pretty straightforward topic but if you are able to touch on Wikipedia's equity gaps, that would be a good addition. You have a lot of news articles and random websites so I would add some sources that could offer information about its social, economic, or historical claims.

Tone and Balance

 * So far, I think you are off to a good start. The article appears to be neutral and doesn't state any claims that are biased. I think that you should expand on the migration of linguine and talk about its popularity in different countries to better represent the topic. Maybe talk about how different countries use linguine or maybe talk about the production process and the groups involved to really target Wikipedia's equity gaps.
 * "Linguini with clams arrived in New York during the 1800s as Southern Italians migrated to the United States. Referred to as Clam Linguine Pasta or linguine in clam sauce, this dish gained popularity among coastal Italians in Campagna"
 * "Referred to as" is too casual and random- use a better way to transition?

Sources and References

 * Your sources are sufficient and do work however, I would try to look at research journals to gain more research-based information that will support your claims and overall, provide a more engaging article. You could look on UW Library, JSTOR, Google Scholar, for some journals that talk more about its historical contexts or maybe research that has been done. I think you could find some older sources since all of your sources are relevant to the 2000s.
 * You did a great job at linking sources to your sentences so I have no critiques on that.

Organization

 * Minor grammatical errors such as placing citations after the period. Sentences structures in the history section are a little choppy and need to be written fully to maintain flow. There is not much context which may be why. I also think that you could add pictures of the dishes listed. The image you already have is great and I really like the description.

Overall impressions

 * Overall, I think you have laid a good foundation. To strengthen your article, I would add more sections that focuses on its production or it's influence and popularity to represent its culture. It is a little hard to make suggestions but I think you know what you're doing. I would just add some more context to your sections which I mentioned earlier.

-Kayla