User:Sagealvarez04/Lance Mackey/Potassium Yttrium Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sagealvarez04


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sagealvarez04/Lance Mackey


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lance Mackey

Evaluate the drafted changes
The very first thing that this article needs is a lead to inform the audiences what they will be reading about. On the second paragraph that starts with "Mackey was diagnosed with throat cancer in 2001" under the Personal Life headings, you need to identify which Mackey you are referring to in this paragraph. The paragraph after that, I think it would be helpful to also states which Mackey you referred to as well. The references need to be separated and put into its specific headings so that the award and honors information or sources mix up together with the references. On the current existing articles, some of the links did not work which I think needs to be update. Similarly, the second paragraph under the Personal Headings need to address the Mackey that they are referring to.