User:Sagegreen04/Inca society/Krillieee Peer Review

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Crismiochumble
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 * User:Sagegreen04/Inca society
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 * Inca society:

Evaluate the drafted changes
Definitely agree that Infrastructure needs an overhaul, the grammar is pretty stilted. Detailing road construction seems like valuable info to me.

With the fishing paragraph, would it make sense to remove the Shipbuilding heading and discuss that as part of maritime infrastructure, since that's such a short paragraph? The info in there could probably use another citation as well. And I'm looking at your sources and seeing that maritime trade imperialism source, which could be a cool example of how Inca infrastructure helped them dominate as a society? The Inca Economy page also has a like only road information, so adding fishing infrastructure seems really important, with how we've been talking about subsistence strategies.

I'm curious about what kind of image you're going to use for infrastructure; the road is kind of obvious, so it would it be more helpful to have some diagram detailing water/fishing infrastructure? If I remember correctly, Incan roads like still survive somewhat / have been adapted into new roads; I don't know if that makes sense to mention, but could be a nice way to wrap up the road paragraph.

Feedback less on your planned edits: there are 5 [citation needed]s in here (2 in Raymond's part, so those are going to be taken care of I assume) that would be nice to address if you need more points. The Lead also should be updated, I think, since it should have touch on major sections of the article; if ceramics/metals and infrastructure are being built up, it would make sense to acknowledge them. The article's jewelry section also seems crazy short and undetailed for being a subheaded section.

Overall I like the changes you're proposing, am interested in the specific content, and think some of the rest of the article (Lead, Shipbuilding) should maybe be modified for overall article cohesion, and definitely made me think about how to do that for my article. Looks cool!