User:Sagegreen04/Inca society/Marcus Wiki Goat Peer Review

General info
Iamasushi (Raymond K)
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sagegreen04/Inca society:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Inca society

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

No current edits are suggested for the lead. The lead section of the current article is convoluted, badly written, and jumps around between the topics of the article. It's "topic sentence" doesn't really introduce the article, and it doesn't introduce the sections found within the article at all. The lead section has some extra detail about the end of the Inca that likely isn't needed. It's very sparse on every other topic.

Content:

The suggested edits to the content are useful and relevant. All of the references suggested for said content are up to date. Additions in infrastructure, fishing, and metallurgy are all necessary, and will do well to support the already existing content. No suggestions are made to close the Wikipedia equity gap.

The current content, while extensive, is weirdly organized, poorly written and by and large trivial. The edits suggested will definitely help support the relatively threadbare sections of the article, while also splitting up some that contain more than their share of information.

Tone and balance:

All suggested edits are balanced in tone, void of and bias, and don't try to persuade readers in any way. The article is currently quite balanced, but could maybe avoid describing the Inca society as "short-lived", which likely has some harmful connotations.

Sources and references:

The sources and references suggested in the edit draft are all up to date, high quality, and strongly applicable to the content of the article. Looking good!

The sources currently presiding in the "Inca Society" article are also quite good. There is one source about Andean women from the 70s, which is a little dated.

Organization:

I think this is currently the strongest section of the draft, and likely the weakest section of the actual article. The grammar, section structure and conciseness could all use student contribution. The ideas presented in the draft for the creation of new sections and the redistribution of overloaded information all make sense. In multiple cases, the images don't apply to the section they're next to, and some of the information is doesn't really fit with the section header. You guys have great ideas here, and really have your work cut out for you.

Images and Media:

There is only one suggestion for an edit to images and media, in which the student may remake a reused image of Incan textile. I think this would be a great addition, as long as it does something for the article that the original image does not.

Looks great overall! Just waiting to see that third group member's contributions.