User:Saifnasr25/Painting of the Six Kings/Epaulina Peer Review


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?
 * 2) I really liked the usage of academic sources and the diligent linking to both the references and to other Wikipedia Pages; it connects the page to a variety of other topics. The short introduction is a simple summary of the article that provides good cursory info, and I liked the overall order of the article. Including various interpretations from different scholars allows for nuance, and the description accompanied with the photograph helps to make sense of the work.
 * 3) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?
 * 4) There's definitely room for fleshing out throughout the article. I'll write more about the Location and History section below but it does seem to be the weakest. Given the acclaim of the fresco, I'm sure that even more sources can be found and the interpretation/description sections can go even deeper. I'm also curious as to if there are other photos of the work, as that first photo seems to be poorly lit with not particularly high image quality.
 * 5) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?
 * 6) The location and history section seems to be bearing a lot of weight in the amount of content it is trying to cover. This is obviously limited by the information that you are able to find, but the article reads very Western-centric (first visited by a Westerner harkens almost back to Columbus and the New World, in my opinion) and I wonder if there is any way to separate Musil's interactions with the fresco from the history of its creation, as those are very different stories. The description also reads as if we can only experience it from Musil's perspective.
 * 7) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? Let them know!
 * 8) I think that your article could also use the addition of a new section (splitting up history as discussed above) like mine as it would best help the flow. For my article, I was intending on adding something about the visitor experience, and I wonder if there is anything you can do with how the painting would have been experienced as a bather.

General info
(Multiple users, Saifnasr25)
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 * Painting of the Six Kings

Evaluate the drafted changes
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