User:Sailorheva/Margaret Ives/Dianelivingston Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?Sailorheva/Margaret Ives

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sailorheva/Margaret_Ives?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Margaret Ives
 * Margaret Ives

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Well done on the article!

Good introductory sentence. The introduction, however, mainly lists her awards which feels celebratory rather than informational. I would rather hear about her main concerns and her work and see awards in a separate section below. I like your many links to other articles on wiki.

The article does tell a bit about what she worked for cause-wise, but perhaps a little more of that would be interesting.

Good sections except that you might include an award section as stated above.

Good description of what she did and when. Well done describing her challenges and how she overcame the system she worked in.

The tone is neutral through most of the article which leaves room for interpretation which is good.

Well organized article--easy to read through. A few grammatical errors that you probably fixed in your finished article that I haven't read.

Can we get a picture of her too?

Did she publish? If so, it would be great to have links to those publications.

The fact that she is a female fits the bill for what wiki deems as an equity gap.

There are not many articles written of her in your references--not sure if there is enough here to push her over the edge to noteworthy. You might want to find another one or two.

Thank you for your work!