User:Sairah Mamik/Anton Syndrome/SidaChu Peer Review

Whose work are you reviewing?
Sairah Mamik

Link to draft you're reviewing
Sairah's draft

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Anton syndrome

Evaluate the drafted changes
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1. Lead

The lead of the original article seems to be full of assertions. It'd be great if Sairah could synthesize some of the findings from her research to improve the original lead with a more balanced tone and more rigorous support from literature.

2. Treatment and Management Strategies

I really loved that Sairah started a new section for treatment and management strategies and agree with her that it is a crucial piece that should have been included. Sairah's writing in this section maintains a good neutral tone and reflects a biopsychosocial perspective on disease. Great job!

There is a period missing at the end of the second paragraph, but that is a very minor slip from the overall quality of her writing.

2. Patient Experiences and Case Studies

I also completely second Sairah's view that more relevant case studies should been added to illustrate the diversity of symptoms and the varied responses to rehabilitation. I think having a section dedicated to patient experiences is a good idea that really exemplifies a patient-centered approach, which we have been learning in class. It would be an even stronger work if, instead of going directly into details about the patient's specific situation, Sairah could start the paragraphs with succinct topic sentences that encapsulate the main findings to be discussed.

3. Sources and References

All references are from credible academic journals and suggest a high degree of reliability. They reflect a good range of time periods, including both the canonical and the newest literature on Anton Syndrome.

There seems to be some automated error messages marked in red by Wikipedia. It isn't a big deal, but It'd be great if Sairah could look into the cause and resolve them.

Overall, the edits look awesome!