User:Sam.canaz/Social media in education/Amwilcza20 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Sam.canz)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing User:Sam.canaz/Social media in education
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Social media in education

Evaluate the drafted changes
In the beginning of your draft, the lead has a great introduction to what you are editing. However, I would suggest clearly having a starting sentence to follow into what you are describing later in the Lead paragraph. Furthermore, the intro is very concise and detailed, and you gave plenty of new information for your article. You also had a string sense of neutrality throughout your writing, and was factual. The last thing I would say is make sure work is more organized. It seems as though it is slightly disorganized and in a paragraph with random facts on different programs that teachers use for schooling. Maybe consider transitions, or more of a clear list of additional information you are placing. In all, this was a well written article, I would just recommend a slight change in organization and making sure you clearly state an introduction in the start of your paragraphs.