User:SamLovesScience/Amoeboid movement/JdanR Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SamLovesScience


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SamLovesScience/Amoeboid_movement?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Amoeboid movement

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

- No changes that I am seeing, and the current article lead looks good.

Content

- Content seem to match well with the topic of the article. I would take a look at the original article and check to make sure there is not too much overlap with what is currently on the page about walking. Content does seem relatively up-to-date with the earliest article taking place in 2006. All content feels relevant, I would once again just check your section on walking to make sure it doesn't overlap too much with what is already written. (or even refer to that section)

Tone and Balance

- Tone seems even throughout, not really trying to prove or disprove anything. Stays neutral and is laying out facts rather than trying to sway the reader towards any one idea. Even focus given across the addition as well.

Sources and References

- Sources seem reputable, and seem to cover a wide array of the topic at hand and from the perspective of multiple journals and publishers. Sources seem relatively current with most occurring within 10 years and the earliest being 2006. Links work as well.

Organization

- There are a few grammatical mistakes. The first sentence has one that might be fixable with the word binding rather than binds. I would recommend reading it aloud and checking for flow. There are a few times when the sentences can be choppy and it might benefit removing a sentences and combining the information with nearby sentences. Otherwise, organization as a whole looks really good. I am intrigued whether this will be placed above what is already in the article or if it will be placed after as that will affect what you do with the section on walking.

Images and Media

- Image looks great, and is done through wikipedia commons.

Peer Review 2, December 9th, 2021

Still looks really good. One thing that caught my attention this time reading through it was that you don't mention the speed of swimming in the last paragraph. The other two you talk about their speed, but you don't really talk about the relative speed of swimming. Just a thought. Otherwise it all looks good and my comments remain from the last peer review.