User:Sam Wege/Caral/CantrellL Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sam Wege


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I didn't see anything in the sandbox so I discussed some of the possible directions you could go in expanding and correcting the article.

The lead of the article starts off well and the first paragraph was very informative. The rest of the information in the lead however, seemed unnecessary or unrelated to the rest of the content of the article and could perhaps be moved to its own section or removed. Overall, the lead should do a better job introducing the topics that will be covered in the rest of the article rather than discussing specific details of Caral and similar societies.

In the subsection "Peaceful society" the article states that Caral must have been a peaceful society as no instruments of war have been uncovered there. This seems very presumptive and puts forth an opinion on the nature of the society with hardly any evidence to support it. In this section, as well as others, it also seems some citations could be added as a lot of facts are given without a source.

Overall it seems like a lot could be added to the article. It gives a good background about the context in which Caral existed but has very little about different aspects of the society itself. There are many possible directions you could take your research in, such as looking more at the architecture, cuisine, etc. One part of the article that seemed particularly interesting to me was the section titled "Scope of site" which mentions how Caral could have been connected to regions as far away as the Amazon through trade. I think the article could benefit from a deeper dive into this and what role trade played in this society.

The overall organization of the article could also use some work. Most of the information in the article is under the section "Archaeological findings", which seems like it could be split up into many different sections based on the various aspects of society it discusses.