User:Samanthalunarivera/Publicity stunt/Marina yasuna Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Publicity stunt


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Publicity stunt

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

I think the lead is a solid start to the article, it gives a clear definition about what publicity stunts are and follows up with multiple examples. The example of the pizza and the YMCA is helpful for readers to understand the concept, as definitions can sometimes get jumbled in our heads. I would remove the part about Gucci Mane's song as it isn't talked about in the section and would do better as it's own paragraph or section like the other examples are.

Content:

The section has supporting evidence but it is lacking content. The obvious answer is to expand the examples and add more filler ones. Also adding an introductory and conclusion paragraph to this one section would help wrap it up nicely and make it a little bit longer as a whole. Maybe add a little but more about what publicity stunts are, the history, positives and negatives, the ethics, etc. Giving examples is helpful, but it needs more content to back them up with.

Tone and Balance:

I didn't notice any bias when I was reading, but if you talked about both sides like I mentioned before you would still be fine with that. The tone is professional and easy to read and digest.

Sources and References:

The references are good, and in correct format! Maybe adding videos or different types of content to support your examples and arguments might help.

Organization:

The article as it is is broken up well, the sections are clearly labeled and in an order that makes the article make sense. As more gets added be sure to keep this format and consistency.

Images and Media:

The images are helpful to the overall writing, the only suggestion I have is to add images of the specific examples talked most about. There are a few examples of publicity stunts on there, but none of these are really talked about much in the article.

Notes:

I think the article is informative and unbiased, but it is a little short. Try adding more examples and trying to connect them with other ones. Showing those connections helps the readers understand better the purpose of publicity stunts and the commonalities that go into them. Maybe add more updated examples, ones the people in this classroom might've heard of or have a connection to.