User:Samarahzeinou/Self-handicapping/Joyb3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Samarahzeinou


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Samarahzeinou/Self-handicapping?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Self-handicapping

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! I think that discussing self-handicapping's occurrence in sports and physical education is a great way to show its application in the real world. I have noted a few grammar and structure errors/choices, that I have bolded for you:

"They found that when it came to mastery goals, there..."

"The findings from this study stipulate that by improving..."

"They found that when it came to mastery goals there was a positive effect resulting from self-esteem." Who is they?

"This study's findings stipulate that improving an..."

In discussing real-world applications of Self-Handicapping, you can talk about athletes, students, depressed individuals, people in high-stress roles, etc. I would add something into the lead that talks about sports/physical education. You could add more to the gender and individual differences if you also wanted. I see a lot of potentials there, too! You could discuss gender differences between male and female athletes and students or focus on younger v. older populations of people, like who is more likely to self-handicap and in which situations. This has a lot of great potential; you've done really well!Here is a possible source for you to review as well: https://reader.elsevier.com/reader/sd/pii/B9780128093245065512?token=B8B69AD5B8A6A6FFB3ADAE3EEA6980ACC81019378681E84CFF62C01421EE1F666CB9D9872DAB0C00C84B3E359B35D174&originRegion=us-east-1&originCreation=20220620024509.