User:Samayfield/Developmental toxicity/Ravyngilstrap Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Samayfield


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I feel like the leading sentence is a little wordy and could be condensed into a more concise format. Overall, I feel like the beginning paragraph is slightly wordy and a lot of it could be shortened to be more straight forward. There are also a few minor grammatical errors, mostly including too many spaces between words or at the beginning of the sentence. There are also a few sentences where it seems as if there were periods put down instead of commas. Other than that I see no other major issues with the current state of your wikipedia page!