User:Samjgreer/Adobe PhotoDeluxe/Awy2006 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Samjgreer & Tina? (not sure of username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Samjgreer/Adobe PhotoDeluxe
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Adobe PhotoDeluxe

Evaluate the drafted changes
Really sorry about my mistake in peer reviewing the existing version of the article instead of your edits!

I think your updates add a lot of substance to the article, with the descriptions of each version and the addition of a lot of history about the software.

I don't exactly remember what was discussed in class about your article so sorry if there are any repeats.

I think that the features section is very informative, but the tone might come off a little more neutral in my opinion if the facts were given first (that "Photo Deluxe supports layering, blurs, sharpening.. etc.), then the introduction of the criticism.

I felt like some of the history might be better split up into paragraphs for the different versions, or else possibly combined with the previous section about the different versions, as some of the content seems to match the theme of that section.

I don't know much I can say about the sources, as a lot of them seem to have gone missing from the internet (hence the use of the wayback machine?). They seem to be pretty firsthand and thus good sources though.

The writing is comprehensible and nicely done.