User:Samkriebel/sandbox

Background
The remains of the Stoa of the Athenians was discovered by Bernard Haussoullier in 1880. The stoa was constructed in Delphi after the naval victory over the Persians at Hellespont in 478 BC. It was dedicated to Apollo, and the Athenians that perished in the Greco-Persian Wars. The location of the Stoa was just to the southeast of Apollo's Temple. Towards the end of the Greco-Persian Wars, Xerxes ordered the construction of two pontoon bridges across the Hellespont. The Athenians and islanders dismantled the bridges connecting Mycale to Hellespont, and returned home bringing the cables from the bridges. These cables were to be dedicated in their temples. The Stoa was initially built to exhibit the spoils of war when the Athenians defeated the Persians. However, in the following years, more exhibits were but displayed on the Stoa as the Athenians gained more naval victories. The war memorials on display were dedicated to the Greek gods, but the memorials also served as monuments of Athens victory. Of the entire Stoa, only the rear polygonal wall, stylobate, and northeast foundations, with a few columns remain today.

Design
A typical Stoa is a Greek portico composed of a back wall and a colonnaded wall up front. The Stoa of the Athenians used a pre-existing wall as its back wall. The pre-existing wall served as a foundation of the terrace supporting the Temple of Apollo. The Stoa of the Athenians was built with a wooden, shedded roof with hipped ends, a wooden entablature, a 3.58-meter intercolumniation, a .39-meter lower column diameter. Unlike most stoas, the Stoa of the Athenians was constructed from marble in the Ionic order. It was built with a total of Seven fluted marble columns. Although the rafters were never recovered, evidence suggests that they spanned across the roof at 3.5-meter intervals.
 * Robin Barber, Greece (Blue Guide), London- N.Y. 2001 (Revised reprint of the 6th edition of 1995), pp. 397.
 * Christopher Mee & Antony Spawforth, Greece (An Oxford Archaeological Guide). Oxford/ OUP, 2001, p. 307-309.
 * Photios Petsas, Delphi : Monuments and Museum. Athens : Krene Editions, 2008, p. 47.

"Stoa of the Athenians" ARTICLE EDIT - GROUP WORKING DRAFT

 * Plan: Split the existing Description section into two separate sections--"Background" and "Design". The existing Description section covers both fields of information, so I think that the information given can be added onto to create two separate sections.


 * Design Information:
 * A Stoa is a colonnaded building
 * Depended structurally on existing Polygonal retaining wall which was constructed to bolster the terrace holding the Temple of Apollo.
 * Columns built from marble in the Ionic order.
 * Wooden roof and entablature
 * 3.58 meter intercolumniation
 * .39 meter lower column diameter
 * Shedded roof with hipped ends
 * In theory, common rafters spanned across the roof every 3.5 meters.
 * Seven fluted marble columns.
 * 31.6 meters X 3.71 meters
 * 

Background
The remains of the Stoa of the Athenians were discovered by Bernard Haussoullier in 1880. The stoa was constructed in Delphi after the naval victory over the Persians at Hellespont in 478 BC. It was dedicated to Apollo, and the Athenians that perished in the Greco-Persian Wars. The location of the Stoa was just to the southeast of Apollo's Temple. Towards the end of the Greco-Persian Wars, Xerxes ordered the construction of two pontoon bridges across the Hellespont. The Athenians and islanders dismantled the bridges connecting Mycale to Hellespont, and returned home bringing the cables from the bridges. These cables were to be dedicated in their temples. The Stoa was initially built to exhibit the spoils of war when the Athenians defeated the Persians. However, in the following years, more exhibits were but displayed on the Stoa as the Athenians gained more naval victories. The war memorials on display were dedicated to the Greek gods, but the memorials also served as monuments of Athens victory. Of the entire Stoa, only the rear polygonal wall, stylobate, and northeast foundations, with a few columns remain today.

Design
A typical Stoa is a Greek portico composed of a back wall and a colonnaded wall up front. The Stoa of the Athenians used a pre-existing wall as its back wall. The pre-existing wall served as a foundation of the terrace supporting the Temple of Apollo. The Stoa of the Athenians was built with a wooden, shedded roof with hipped ends, a wooden entablature, a 3.58-meter intercolumniation, a .39-meter lower column diameter. Unlike most stoas, the Stoa of the Athenians was constructed from marble in the Ionic order. It was built with a total of Seven fluted marble columns. Although the rafters were never recovered, evidence suggests that they spanned across the roof at 3.5-meter intervals. ~ You might consider adding an introductory sentence explaining what the Stoa was rather than jumping straight into the background. The reader doesn't really know what to expect if they don't already know what the Stoa is/was.
 * Robin Barber, Greece (Blue Guide), London- N.Y. 2001 (Revised reprint of the 6th edition of 1995), pp. 397.
 * Christopher Mee & Antony Spawforth, Greece (An Oxford Archaeological Guide). Oxford/ OUP, 2001, p. 307-309.
 * Photios Petsas, Delphi : Monuments and Museum. Athens : Krene Editions, 2008, p. 47.

Also, I think you need to add an apostrophe after "monuments of Athens victory". It should be "monuments of Athens' victory", or just reword to make it less awkward.

One last question, how are the cables across the Hellespont connected to the Stoa? Were the cables used in the construction of the Stoa? Were they memorialized in the same temple? I was a bit confused there. Overall, good work.

AbigailJohnson58 (talk) 22:29, 22 November 2017 ( Semjee (talk) 18:23, 9 December 2017 (UTC)check your capitalization on certain words, especially Stoa. You have some capitalized and some not. Also the last sentence of the first section, maybe delete one of the “memorials” it seems kind of repetitive.MarissaAlderson (talk) 18:30, 20 November 2017 (UTC) MarissaAlderson (talk) 18:32, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Semjee (talk) 18:22, 9 December 2017 (UTC) I think you need to add links for words/articles that can be found from the Wikipedia articles. For example; you can link Persians at Hellespont with Dardanelles, and it will give you more background information and additional information for your article. Also, you need one more citation on the sentence presenting the dimensions of the the Stoa. Lastly, I think you did a good job!

Dyuke review:

1. You could give more backgrounf information on the historical events that initiated the Stoa, like when and why Athenians fought with Persians.

2. In Design section, you can use more complex sentences instaed of small and short sentences.

3. Linking some names and places with wikipedia articles will help you to broaden your information for readers.

/"Acropolis of Rhodes" ARTICLE EDIT
 * Add on to one of the weak sections. The "Stoa Building" and "Artemision" sections lack information.
 * Abandoned.

"Attica" ARTICLE EVALUATION

 * Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?
 * The article appears to remain relevant. Nothing distracted me.
 * Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * The article does appear neutral...then again, there aren't too many sides to take.
 * Are there viewpoints that are over-represented, or underrepresented?
 * Viewpoints appear to be thorough.
 * Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?
 * The links do work, they provide proper information.
 * Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?
 * References are not cited properly--they are incomplete.
 * Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?
 * Updates are on fleek.
 * Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?
 * The editors are discussing External link modifications and the Real Logo of Attica
 * How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?
 * Start-Class, Mid-Importance. It's part of the WikiProject Greece.
 * How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?
 * We haven't discussed Attica in class.