User:SammiMaloney/Energy bar/Kclav15 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SammiMaloney


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SammiMaloney/Energy_bar?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Energy bar

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- Lead updated with new content from drafter

- Lead contains concise introductory sentence that introduces the content of the article

- Lead contains brief introduction of the articles major sections

- Lead is clear and concise

Content:

- Content added relevant to topic

- Content appears up to date

- Missing content that could be added including history, creation, possibly statistics regarding most popular brands and consumption

- No persuasion apparent

Tone and balance:

- Content appears neutral

- No heavily biased claims

- No over or under represented viewpoints

- No persuasion apparent

Sources and references:

- Content backed by relevant sources

- Sources appear thorough, though certain sources could be added for a greater variety of content and information

Organization:

- Content is concise, clear, and easy to follow

- No grammatical errors detected

- Content is well organized through clear section breakdowns

Images and media:

- One image detected, could be changed for a more up to date, appealing look

- Another image could be added to increase depth of understanding

Overall impressions:

- Clear and easy to read

- Good variety of sources

- Sections that should be added include history/creation of energy bars, statistics regarding consumption

- Lacking depth of information

- Could do well to go through and re-evaluate the tone of certain sentences in order for it to sound more encyclopedic