User:Samtaliuw/Aston Martin in Formula One/11boba Peer Review

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samtaliuw


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 * User:Samtaliuw/Aston Martin in Formula One


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 * Aston Martin in Formula One

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Hi! I really enjoyed reading your article! I've only ever heard about the Aston Martin and Formula One so it was cool to learn what it was.

Really solid lead! Super informational and well written. I don't know if "grid" is racing lingo, but if it's like "go off the grid" I might try to rephrase it in a more encyclopedic tone. I'm not completely certain but I believe team is a collective noun making it singular so pronouns like they should be changed to "it" maybe. And I think it would help readers better understand what Aston Martin is the first sentence was either rephrased slightly or there was a second sentence that explained whether aston martin is the team or the car manufacturer because I had trouble understanding it if I hadn't read on. I also noticed that some of your statements are missing citations so I would try to cite as much as possible so that it doesn't get taken down for not having a source because it's really good writing and context. (especially the section where it's like a quote of Richards saying they had a long way to go, that should definitely be cited) I also might consider splitting up the potential return and sponsorship section or rephrasing that section title because the sponsorship sentence reads a bit sudden to me.

Really good job doing the wikilink thing and linking the key words to existing wikipedia pages! I really enjoy the encyclopedic tone, I feel as if I'm reading a published wikipedia page!

Overall, super solid article! I think you made really deserved and good choices about additions and it reads really nicely! I would continue to find more citations to support statements or deleting information that is not supported. Really good job!