User:Samuelkades/Aphonopelma chalcodes/Lbeqaj Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Samuelkades


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Samuelkades/Aphonopelma_chalcodes?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aphonopelma chalcodes

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
The introductory sentence is good and brief, I think the lead is a bit too detailed in regards to the description of the spider, I think you should keep the spider length under physiological description. It does not include information that is not covered in the article but it also does not introduce all the information covered in the article. In your introduction you cover description, location/distribution, you can potentially briefly mention low toxicity, a long life expectancy and large number of offspring.

Content
The content is up to date, as you use sources that are fairly recent and it is all relevant to your species and important information about it. Your content certainly adds to the already existing article as you have more sub sections and your information is more thorough.

Tone and balance
The content maintains a neutral tone, and there is no favoring of information or any attempt to sway the reader. It is informative and unbiased.

Sources and references
The content is backed by a reliable second source of information. The content does accurately reflect what the sources say. There is a variety in the published dates of the sources, but 3/6 are fairly recent. 2/6 sources are peer reviewed articles and 2/6 sources are books, maybe if you could find one-two more peer reviewed article to add to your references that would be good.

Organization
"The spider undergoes sexual differentiation later in development, as it is born resembling a female. After several years, the spider undergoes sexual differentiation where It may begin to resemble male traits." you say the spider undergoes sexual differentiation twice back to back in these sentences, and it it slightly repetitive/redundant, maybe find a way to condense these two sentences or word it another way?

"The venom of A. chalcodes is not recognized as highly dangerous to humans. The level of venom is not significantly higher in comparison to a bee sting."

The sentence structure in these is a little awkward maybe instead of saying "is not recognized as highly dangerous" you can say "is not very dangerous" or "is not considered very dangerous". Also, "The level of venom is not significantly higher in comparison to a bee sting." can be changed to "When compared to a bee sting, the level of venom is not much higher".

Images and Media
There are no images and media. You should add some!

Overall
Good article, content wise, it was very informative and expands on the current version of the article.

Needs some images and media, and some of the sentence structure can be improved.