User:San264/Shadow zone/KRose4 Peer Review

I'm a bit unsure which parts of the article you've added and which were already there, because the sandbox page and article page look almost the same. Because of this, I'm just going to review the entire article.

Overall, this is a good start and it introduces the topic well. My improvement suggestions are below:


 * At the moment, everything is just one big block of text. Splitting up the article into separate sections would help with readability and understanding.
 * There doesn't seem to be a specific lead section, unless you consider the entire article the lead. The lead should be a concise summary of what will be in the article and everything in the lead should then be further explained and expanded on in the main body. I think having a brief paragraph that describes the topic without going into too much detail would be very beneficial and help with readability.
 * There are only 5 references, so expanding the number of references and making sure just about every sentence has a citation would be good.

Great job!