User:Sanderba3037/Heat Illness/Sanderba3037 Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? (provide username)

Chadwibe4616


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:

User:Chadwibe4616/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Lead editing, was not necessary for this Assignment

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?

Yes, the original wiki page, doesn't have a very extensive epidemiology page and mostly looks into future possibilities, not the numbers associated with today


 * Is the content added up-to-date?

The sources aren't terrible out of date, but finding a newer source might upgrade the validity of the numbers cited in the work


 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * no, everything seems to be related.
 * it would probably be good to try and find numbers for all of the heat illnesses that are listed in the original article, as it seems like the new info being added seems to focus on heat stroke

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * yes
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * no
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * no
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * no

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * yes
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * seems to be a little on the low end for what I think would be available for sources about heat illnesses
 * Are the sources current?
 * somewhat
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * yes

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * hasn't been fully written out yet, so it is a little hard to read
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * a couple, make sure to double check grammar, reading out loud helps
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * from what i can tell yes

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

No images need to be added for the epidemiology section

If a graph or pie chart could be found, that might be an interesting graphic to include

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * yes
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * seems to be a decent representation, maybe a little lacking
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * yes
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?
 * not in its current state

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * All content added helps the current article be more complete, helps lie out today's numbers on how many people get affected by heat illnesses. Like i mentioned before, it might be good to try and find more numbers about all of the illnesses listed in the original article.