User:Sandra1795/Netflix and LGBT representation in animation/Kaleasantoyo Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Sandra1795

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sandra1795/Netflix_and_LGBT_representation_in_animation?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Netflix and LGBT representation in animation

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * The lead is not overly detailed, which is good. It could have more information, but it does reflect what you are going to add in the article
 * The content of your information is very relevant and significant to the article.
 * The words underlined are grammar corrections I think could help: CSUN campus news article discusses how the representation of LGBT in the media will help to make the new generation be more open-minded and won't be limited to certain things due to their gender or sexuality. (bibliography)
 * The words underlined are grammar corrections I think could help:Gay characters also prominently appeared in BoJack Horseman. Hollyhock, a female teenage horse and Bojack's sister, has eight adoptive fathers (Dashawn Manheim, Steve Mannheim, Jose Guerrero, Cupe Robinson III, Otto Zilberschlag, Arturo "Ice Man" Fonzerelli, Gregory Hsung, and Quackers McQuack) in a consensual polyamorous gay relationship.[1]With this, some critics praised the show for realistically portraying homosexuality.[2] (Sandbox)
 * In the season 3 finale of BoJack Horseman, "That Went Well," Todd Chavez confides in his friend Emily that he doesn't think he is either straight or gay and in fact "might be nothing". He explores the identity further in season 4 and accepts his asexuality while meeting others who share his orientation.[1] (sandbox)
 * I believe the tone you included was neutral and appropriate for adding to the article.
 * I believe your overall additions will be valuable to included more in depth detail about the characters and the storyline.
 * Your resource links do work
 * The organization of your work is clear and easy to read.