User:Sandrinelessardaubin/Louis Comfort Tiffany/Mymit88 Peer Review

General info
Article assigned to : Hailey Fortune, Maarg0ot, Ambre.simonin
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Utilisateur:Hailey_Fortune/Louis_Comfort_Tiffany
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Louis_Comfort_Tiffany

Evaluate the drafted changes
'''Coucou! Voici mon évaluation des pairs :'''

Lead

Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? From what I can read in the sandbox, the lead has not been updated yet. However, the team did write down some ideas on how they will update the lead later.

Content

Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? From the draft, I can only read the ideas on what to add to the article, so my evaluation of the content is limited. Nevertheless, from the ideas your team wrote down, I do think the content will be relevant to the topic of Louis Comfort Tiffany. For example, you wrote :
 * Biographie :
 * (Jeunesse) Parler de sa famille, l’endroit où il est né, les éléments qui l’ont influencés depuis son jeune âge.
 * (Créer une section : Éducation) En séparant la catégorie jeunesse et éducation, on va pouvoir rendre le texte plus fluide et mieux structuré. Aborder ses voyages scolaires, les écoles où il a étudié ainsi que sa première réalisation en tant qu’étudiant?
 * (Carrière) : sa carrière fut chargée, il manque énormément d’informations sur ses différentes entreprises / inspirations / rencontres Œuvres :
 * Il serait intéressant d’ajouter une catégorie à propos des mouvements / courants / styles servant d’inspiration pour ses œuvres.
 * Il serait pertinent de parler des œuvres avant de parler des récompenses / médailles qu’il a gagné. Les œuvres sont la raison pour laquelle il a gagné des prix, donc ceux-ci devraient être placés en premier. (Structure à revoir)
 * Louis C. Tiffany a travaillé avec plus d’éléments que le verre et l’architecture d’intérieur, alors pourquoi est-ce qu'on aborde juste ceux-là ? (Par exemple: il était peintre et photographe aussi, donc on devrait retrouver un paragraphe sur ses œuvres photographiques et ses peintures.) These ideas on what to add to the article on Louis CT show that your team is in the right direction. I think you identified the key parts that are missing to the article.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? Like I mentioned before, I can only read the ideas on what to add to the article, so my evaluation of the content is limited. So I can't say if the information is recent or not, since there's no sources in the sandbox.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? Not really, since it's about a white man in the 20th century.

Tone and Balance

Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? After reading the draft article in their sandbox, I would say that the content added is in fact neutral. The information is clear and does not attempt to persuade me. But since it's only a draft on what to add to the article, it's not very accurate. I can't say for sure if the text they add to the article will be neutral or not.

Sources and References

Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? the team did not add any sources in the sandbox, so I can't say if they are reliable or not.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? There is no links for me to try.

Images and Media

Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? The team mentioned in the sandbox that they will try to add pictures to the article, which is great!

Organization

Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? Yes and no. Yes, the content added in the sandbox is well-written and easy to read. The information is put in a concise way, which allows the reader to find information easily and quickly. The sentences are clear and they are not to long. However, like I mentioned before, I can only read the ideas on what to add to the article, so my evaluation of the content is limited.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? I didn't see any spelling errors, which is great, good job!
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? Yes they organized the content really well! They added different sections of information about Louis Comfort Tiffany, which helps organize the text. For example, they divided the text in sub categories like: bibliographie, oeuvres, principales expositions, galerie photographique.

-Myriam T.