User:Sandyseac/Peggy Papp/ShipsAndStones Peer Review

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The tone is great! It did not seem to lead toward any particular position.

The first phrasing of the first paragraph under "Early Life and Education" was a little awkward. I would find a way to improve flow.

I would suggest adding links to her various works, in case someone wants to do more research about that specifically. Or, if the books contain the information, explicitly state which one.