User:Santanavictianny/Moral evil/CorrinBaker Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Santanavictianny


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: N/A, work has been done on article, not sandbox
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Moral evil

Lead
The lead has been updated, including some edits to grammatical and wording issues, and a substantial amount of work has been added in a paragraph at the bottom. However, it seems like this information would merit its own section rather than remaining with the lead.

Content
The content is relative and informative for the topic. The resources are from 2007 and 2014, I think the 2014 is current enough but 2007 might be a little older. I don't know how research in philosophy is measured in terms of how current something is considered, but in English studies something from 2007 would be considered current enough. If this is the same for philosophy I wouldn't worry about it.

Tone & Balance
The writing remains neutral and doesn't seem to demonstrate a desire to sway the reader. The content contributes to an understanding of the moral complexity of the topic without sharing what the author believes to be more morally evil.

Sources & References
I already spoke on the dates of the references, but the information added also accurately reflects the sources. There doesn't appear to be a lot of diversity in the sources but there are still only two, so I'm sure you'd be able to find an additional source by someone who is part of an under represented group.

Organization
I do think the large paragraph added at the end should be a separate section, and then the section outline could be added beneath the lead. Additionally, there are some grammatical errors and sentence fragments. For example, "But murder is morally evil for many peoples point of views, where an accidental death is not." could be changed to begin with, "Despite this," or something similar. The first sentence might be made more clear by adding a comma between the words "death" and "preventing," and other minor things throughout the paragraph. I think some minor edits would make the writing a little clearer and easier for readers to understand.

Final Notes
The study you've added is really interesting and I think does a lot to support an understanding of the topic, and I think the edits I mentioned earlier may help highlight its significance. You've done a substantial amount of work and, as a reader, I feel that I have a decent start to understanding the topic which I did not understand before. So, mission accomplished!